Pura López Colomé | Enrique Alda
| | Published: 17 March, 2019
ISSUE 14 | Pages: 218-232 | PDF | DOAJ | https://doi.org/10.24162/EI2019-8875

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Introduction. On Enrique Alda’s versions

Upon reading Seamus Heaney’s early poetry collections – and this was a long time ago – I was surprised by his subtle way of offering up his own versions of poems by other authors as a way to making them his own and moulding them with exacting precision into the specific theme of each given collection. Rather than referring to them as “translations”, he used the word after as an antecedent (to works by the likes of Dante, Baudelaire, Virgil, and some Gaelic authors) with the aim of reworking them into newly inspired viewpoints a posteriori; thus, the poem’s metaphors and images, initially belonging to a different language, would be born again, this time to a different voice and melody – his own – in such a way that his harmonious yet elusive “music of events” was crafted into something visible and audible. I owe this great Captain the sudden epiphany of conceiving translation as creation, as an opportunity of feeding foreign sounds to a symphony of musical inimitability. As time went on, I had the chance to be present at some of his poetry readings, attended by audiences of varying sizes, where – to put it this way – “the yellow bittern”, otherwise known as the seventeenth-century “An Bunnán Bui”, would take flight in yet another twentieth-century poem by Heaney.

The Irish tradition is fortunate enough to host poet-translators whose bilingual output has been fostered by the co-existence of two languages: these authors write in what they feel to be their mother tongue, and then harken back to their second language. While those of us who live under different linguistic circumstances come across this realization in alternative ways, considering this background there is no room for doubt that the person wishing to render a poem into a different language must necessarily be a poet, or else should have experienced first-hand the implications of writing without colliding against semantic plurality. This poet-translator may have never published their poems; however, he or she has written them into existence, even if privately and far from the gaze of discerning eyes, or will do so in the future. Deep down, nevertheless, this poet must firmly believe that “translating” poetry is far from being a mere task of chancing upon perfect equivalents. It is precisely in this light that renowned poet Anne Carson defines as synonymy the realtionship between poetry and translation, even if one is faced with muttering or complete silence. After all, absolute ownership of a poem has grown to matter less and less now that we have come to understand Homer as a conglomerate of poets rather than an individual entity.

Enrique Alda’s translations of Caitlín Maude (1941-1982) and Mary O’Malley – the former being an excellent example of the Gaelic-English-Spanish triangle and the latter’s poetry in English likewise dancing to vibrant Gaelic rhythms – are Greek in their approach: that is, they see language as the veil under which the truth of all things shines away, and poetry as the revealing rip in the fabric elaborated by the individual language in question. The intense flow of his versions immediately catches the eye, in a way which recalls the literary compulsion of the naturally risk-taking poet, rather than the careful craftsman. His achievements remind one of Borges’s perceptions on translation: “Translations are far from being inferior to the original, but we must necessarily perceive a difference between them … which is not within the reach of the translator; rather, it lies in the way poetry is read”.

Both poets owe themselves to Connemara, by which I mean that each utilizes her own style to replicate the deep rhythms and tonalities of the regional voice. While Maude’s poetry stems from the Gaelic language, O’Malley’s poetry is in English, which bridges both poets with Enrique Alda’s language.

Caitlín Maude’s versions (not the originals) have been put forth by a variety of authors intent on paying tribute to her genuine way of singing in the dark (in the corner of a room, or the darkness underneath the speaker’s closed eyes) and the quiet summoning of readers or listeners willing to participate. Translators into English such as Trodden Keefe, Fitzmaurice, Hartnett and Ní Chonchúir show the necessity to emulate the brief and mostly nasal pauses, the long syllables at the end of sentences, the glissandos, and even the endings struggling to be spoken rather than sung – in itself a trait of ancient a cappella singing. Enrique is aware of the incapacity of the Spanish language to achieve that effect. He decides, therefore, to bestow his poetic enterprise with precise originality through the use of careful repetitions and impeccably flawless Castilian cadences; he never loses sight of the translator’s task of contributing something beyond the original version, an outcome in turn to be desired from an artistic point of view, as Walter Benjamin and George Steiner have noted. The titles he chooses exceed mere literalism (“Tangled” is “Maraña”; “Interval” becomes “Arrebato”; “Entreaty” is translated into “Súplica”, to mentioned but a few), thus instating a rigorous identification between meaning and content which he later sends to multiple directions and ends with his own personal touch in the form of a risky addendum. Let me briefly sample the poem “Maraña”, which might as well have been composed in our own language. So faultlessly does the musicality of the final lines strengthen the original meaning that the protagonist/speaker feels compelled to actively – rather than passively – descend, wander out, and be swallowed whole by the depths of sorrow and loneliness: “Pasea esta noche por la playa,/mi amor,/ pasea y detén tus lágrimas,/ levántate y pasea esta noche,/no te arrodilles más/ante esa tumba en la montaña,/sus flores están marchitas/y mis huesos descompuestos…/esta noche te llamo/desde las profundidades del océano…./Una vez recorrí la orilla/hasta el final de la playa,/donde las olas jugaban/y la blanca espuma besaba mis pies./Inundando lentamente mi mirada/allí, en lo más profundo,/en la maraña de olas y espuma,/vi la soledad en tus ojos/y la pena en tu rostro”.

These are both the original and Alda’s solution to the ending of the poem:

“I wandered out in the depths/From knees to waist/And from waist to shoulders/Until I was swallowed/In sorrow and loneliness”.

“Descendí hasta las profundidades/de la rodilla a la cintura/y de la cintura a los hombros,/hasta que me hundí/en la soledad y la pena”.

It is likely that the spiritual direction of this song of love and lament has influenced the translator’s choice of a well-defined musicality, which is evidenced in the speaker’s desire to actually sink.

In the case of Mary O’Malley, Enrique’s approach unearths further nuances of meaning and, as I see it, seeks to identify himself with the voice of the female through the reverberation of an intimate, private, and womanly speech, one which reaches out to its echo in the world. This time, poetic music does not lead the way; instead, it is the author’s voice – whose particularly opaque elevation is painted with a religious, historical, mythological and legendary veneer and, as such, is not necessarily melodious – that weaves together landscape and word, place and syllable, home and consonants, brusque, loss-inducing, rupture-sounding silences and traditional moulds which have long lost their arbitrariness. The emotions of the natural world are brought to life in Spanish through the names of flowers and the most minute details of humans and animals, encapsulating both into a destiny which, far from being always entirely happy, is oftentimes cruel. I can earnestly say that in Alda’s versions I do not search for the leftovers of poetic English: I am captivated by his symbols in Spanish of a present time blended into a continuous past: “Lo sabe por los caballos/ parados en todas partes/en los campos, la mirada/fluida como versos,/dejados de lado durante años/junto al rosario y las oraciones/pero abundantes de nuevo/como prímulas o aulagas;/por el sucinto temblor en su piel/sabe que escuchan/las noticias que atañen/nuestro destino y el suyo”.

A distinguished translation of poetry can come exceedingly close to the original. It can let death abandon the pile of worn-out topics and come to the fore (in, as Enrique phrases it, “las voces atrapadas de los ahogados/ o el extraño grito de criaturas mudas/que anhelan algo más,/ser humanas”).  It can make sure that speaking a language or not does not guarantee anything, thereby letting us prove that languages are not commanded. That poetry transcends all this.

Pura López Colomé

(Translated into English by Germán Asensio Peral)

A note by the editor 

Every effort has been made to trace copyright holders and to obtain their permission for the use of copyright material. The editor apologizes for any errors or omissions and would be grateful if notified of any corrections that should be incorporated in this year’s issue of Estudios Irlandeses.

Poems by Caitlín Maude

Aimhréidhe

Siúil, a ghrá,Cois trá anocht –

Siúil agus cuir uait

na deora –

éirigh agus siúil anocht

ná feac do ghlúin feasta

ag uaigh sin an tsléibhe –

tá na blátha sin feoite

agus tá mo chnámhasa dreoite…

(Labhraim leat anocht

ó íochtar mara –

labhraim leat gach oíche

ó íochtar mara…)

Shiúileas lá cois trá

shiúileas go híochtar trá –

rinne tonn súgradh le tonn –

ligh an cúr bán mo chosa –

d’ardaíos mo shúil go mall

gur ansiúd amuigh ar an domhain

in aimhréidhe cúir agus toinn

chonaic an t-uaigneas id shúil

‘gus an doilíos id ghunúis

Shiúileas amach ar an domhain

ó ghlúine go com

agus ó chom go guaillí

nó gur slogadh mé

sa doilíos gus san uaigneas

 

Tangled Maraña
Wander, my love

along the shore tonight –

wander and stop

your weeping –

rise up and wander tonight

bend your knees no more

at that mountain grave –

those flowers are wihtered

and my bones are mouldering…

I speak to you tonight

from sea-depth —

I speak to you every night

from sea depth…

 

I once wandered along the shore

I wandered to shore-end –

wave made game with wave –

white foam licked my feet –

slowly seeping into my vision

there out in the depths

in the tangle of foam and wave

I saw the loneliness in your eyes

and the sorrow in your face

 

I wandered out in the depths

from knees to waist

and from waist to shoulders

until I was swallowed

in sorrow and loneliness

 

(Trans. Joan Trodden Keefe)

Pasea esta noche por la playa

mi amor

pasea y detén tus lágrimas,

levántate y pasea esta noche,

no te arrodilles más

ante esa tumba en la montaña,

sus flores están marchitas

y mis huesos descompuestos…

esta noche te llamo

desde las profundidades del océano

todas las noches te llamo

desde las profundidades del océano…

 

 

una vez recorrí la orilla

hasta el final de la playa,

donde las olas jugaban

y la blanca espuma besaba mis pies.

Inundando lentamente mi mirada

allí, en lo más profundo,

en la maraña de olas y espuma,

vi la soledad en tus ojos

y la pena en tu rostro.

 

descendí hasta las profundidades

de la rodilla a la cintura

y de la cintura a los hombros,

hasta que me hundí

en la soledad y la pena.

 

Impí

A ógánaigh,

ná tar i mo dháil,

ná labhair…

is binn iad

briathra grá —

is binne aríst

an friotal

nár dúradh ariamh —

níl breith

gan smál —

breith briathar

amhlaidh atá

is ní bheadh ann

ach ‘rogha an dá dhíogh’

ó tharla

an scéal mar ‘tá…

ná bris

an ghloine ghlan

‘tá eadrainn

(ní bristear gloine

gan fuil is pian)

óir tá Neamh

nó Ifreann thall

‘gus cén mhaith Neamh

mura mairfidh sé

go bráth? —

ní Ifreann

go hIfreann

iar-Neimhe…

impím aríst,

ná labhair,

a ógánaigh,

a ‘Dhiarmaid’,

is beidh muid suaimhneach —

an tuiscint do-theangmhaithe

eadrainn

gan gair againn

drannadh leis

le saol na saol

is é dár mealladh

de shíor —

ach impím…

ná labhair…

 

Entreaty Súplica
Young man,

do not come near me,

do not speak…

the words of love

are sweet —

but sweeter still

is the word

that was never uttered —

no choice

is without stain —

the choice of words

is much the same

and this would be

to choose between evils

in our present

situation…

 

Do not break

the clear glass

between us

(no glass is broken

without blood and pain)

for beyond is Heaven

or beyond is Hell

and what good is Heaven

if it is not

for ever? —

the loss of

Heaven

is the worst Hell…

 

I again implore you,

do not speak,

young man,

my “Diarmaid”,

and we will be at peace —

untouchable understanding

between us

we will have no cause

to touch it

ever

as it ever

allures us —

but I implore you…

do not speak…

 

(Trans. Gabriel Fitzmaurice)

Joven

no te acerques

no hables…

dulces son

las palabras de amor

pero más dulce es aún

la palabra no pronunciada

ninguna elección carece de mácula,

ni siquiera con las palabras,

elegirlas en esta situación

sería decidir entre la espada y la pared…

 

 

 

 

 

 

no rompas

el diáfano cristal

que nos separa

(ninguno se quiebra

sin sangre y dolor)

al otro lado se hallan

el cielo o el infierno

y ¿de qué sirve el cielo

si no es eterno?

no hay peor infierno

que haber conocido el cielo…

 

 

 

de nuevo, te lo imploro

no hables

mi Diarmaid

y tendremos paz,

nunca habrá necesidad de tocar

ese entendimiento intangible

entre nosotros

que siempre nos tienta

pero, te lo ruego,

no hables…

 

 

Lá amháin

Lá amháin

bhí an clóscríobhaí tinn —

bhí ar stiúrthóir an chomhlachta

an clóscríobhán

a thabhairt isteach

ina oifig féin

chuir na litreacha

an oiread déistin air

gur stróic sé iad

‘gus gur scríobh sé dán

tamall ina dhiaidh

d’éirigh sé as a phost

‘gus ina dhiaidh sin

a theach

a bhean

agus a chlann

agus anois

tá sé ina fhile

an fear bocht

 

One Day Un Día
One day

the typist was sick

 

the company director

had to take the typewriter

into his office

 

the letters

so disgusted him

that he tore them up

and wrote a poem

 

shortly after that

he left his job

and after that

his house

his wife

his kids

 

and now he’s a poet

 

the poor fucker.

 

(Trans. Michael Hartnett)

Un día

la mecanógrafa se puso enferma

 

el director de la empresa

tuvo que llevar la máquina de escribir

a su despacho

 

las cartas

le desagradaron tanto

que las rompió

y escribió un poema

 

poco después

dejó el trabajo

y más tarde

dejó su casa

a su mujer

y a su familia

 

ahora es poeta,

 

el pobre idiota.

 

Tá sé in am dán deiridh a scríobh

Tá sé in am dán deiridh a scríobh.

dán mar ‘bheadh inneall nua-aoiseach den scoth

a bhfuil chuile smaoineamh i dtaisce ina chroí.

dán mar ‘bheadh leabhar

nach gá a léamh

mar ‘bheadh foclóir

aon leathanaigh

aon teangan

mar ‘bheadh pictiúr

Ghairdín Pharrthais th’éis pheaca Éabh’.

dán teilifíse le nuacht an lae

dán a bhrisfeas do chroí

blaosc uibhe do chroí

ar an toirt

dán a bhfuil muirín fhada air

na mílte dánta beaga gleoite

ar imeall an phictiúir

dánta grá ‘le fíormhothúchán’

dán siopa 29/11

dán tourists

a thugann aicídeacha teochreasacha leo

agus airgead

a thugann drochsmaointe don easpag

a chaitheann seanmóir bhreise a scríobh don deoise

lena choinsias a ghlanadh

dán galánta

dán leathghalánta

ciomach de dhán

 

It’s Time To Write A Poem Es Hora De Escribir Un Poema
It’s time to write a poem

a poem like the best most modern machine

every thought stored up inside it

a poem like a book

one need not read

like a dictionary

with one page

with one language

like a picture

of Paradise after Eve’s sin

 

a telly-poem with daily news

a poem to break your heart

your eggshell heart

your egg of putty heart

on the spot

 

a longtailed poem

thousands of pretty poemlets

at the edge of the picture

a love poem “with true emotion”

 

a shop poem 29/11

a poem for tourists

that gives them tropical diseases

and money

that gives bad thoughts to the bishop

who has to write an extra sermon for the diocese

 

a stylish poem

a half-stylish poem

a slut of a poem

a poem for women and children

a totally useless poem

poem

litany

poem.

 

(Trans. Michael Hartnett)

Es hora de escribir un poema

un poema que sea la mejor de las máquinas modernas

que almacene todos los pensamientos

un poema semejante a un libro

que no es necesario leer,

a un diccionario

de una página

y un idioma,

a una imagen

del paraíso después del pecado de Eva

 

un poema telediario

un poema que te rompa el corazón

la delicada cáscara de tu corazón

tu corazón maleable

al instante

 

un poema que traiga cola

miles de bonitos poemitas

al borde de la imagen

un poema de amor «con verdadera emoción»

 

un poema comercial un año y un día

un poema para turistas

que les transmita enfermedades tropicales

y dinero

que inspire malos pensamientos al obispo

y le obligue a escribir un sermón más para la diócesis

 

un poema elegante

un poema medio elegante

un poema puta

un poema para mujeres y niños

un poema totalmente inútil

poema

letanía

poema

 

Treall

Tabhair dom casúr

nó tua

go mbrisfead is

go millfead

an teach seo,

go ndéanfad tairseach

den fhardoras

‘gus urláir de na ballaí,

go dtiocfaidh scraith

agus díon agus

simléir anuas

le neart mo chuid

allais…

Sín chugam anois

na cláir is na tairní

go dtóigfead

an teach eile seo…

Ach, a Dhia, táim tuirseach!

 

Interval Arrebato
Hand me a hammer

or a hatchet

to demolish and

to smash

this house,

to make a threshold

of the lintel

and floors of the walls,

so that the scraws

and roof and

chimney are razed

with the force of my

sweat…

 

Now hand me

the planks and the nails

so that I can build

this other house…

 

But, my God, I’m tired!

 

(Trans. Nuala Ní Chonchúir)

Dame un martillo

o un hacha

para derribar y

hacer pedazos

esta casa,

para crear un umbral

con el dintel

y suelos con las paredes,

para desmantelar

la techumbre de turba

y la chimenea

con el sudor de mi frente…

 

Ahora, dame

tablas y clavos

para construir

otra casa…

 

Pero, ¡Dios mío!, estoy tan cansada…

 

Na blátha

Chuas amach an mhaidin sin

i mo pháiste

folaithe, do-ghonta –

tháinigeas isteach

i mo dhuine fásta

m’anam nocht feannta –

céadbhlátha an earraigh

–  blátha buí – sláimín,

i lár an ghairdín –

ní raibh ann

ach ala gan chomhaireamh

inar bhlaiseas

rud éicint

nár den tsaol seo

inar cuireadh

ó aithne

orm féin mé

gur thuigeas

go rabhas leonta

le lann na háille –

lann ar a hainm

le glaine

le géire

níor bhlátha na blátha

ach beos

áille agus céasadh.

 

The Flowers Las Flores
I went out that morning

a child

unaware, invulnerable –

 

I returned

an adult

my soul bared, flayed –

 

spring’s first flowers

– tufted buttery blooms,

standing in the garden –

 

it was only

a passing moment

in which I tasted

something

otherworldly

in which I

was pulled

out of myself

to understand

that I’d been wounded

by beauty’s blade –

 

beauty’s name made

clean

keen

 

these flowers were not just flowers

but life

beauty and torment.

 

(Trans. Nuala Ní Chonchúir)

Aquella mañana salí

siendo una niña

inconsciente, invulnerable

 

Regresé

adulta

con el alma desnuda, desollada

 

las primeras flores de primavera,

ramilletes de brotes dorados,

nacían en el jardín

 

fue un instante fugaz

en el que percibí

algo sobrenatural,

en el que despojada

de mí misma

comprendí

que me había herido

el filo de la belleza

 

y su nombre se reveló

puro

nítido

 

no eran simples flores,

sino vida

belleza y tormento

 

Poems by Mary O’Malley

News Noticias
He knows by the horses

that are everywhere in the fields

 

unemployed, their gaze

fluent as verses,

 

put aside for years

with the rosary beads and prayers

 

but lately plentiful again

as primroses or furze;

 

by the quick shivers of their skin

he knows they are listening

 

to news that concerns

our fate and theirs.

 

Lo sabe por los caballos

parados en todas partes

 

en los campos, la mirada

fluida como versos,

 

dejados de lado durante años

junto al rosario y las oraciones

 

pero abundantes de nuevo

como prímulas o aulagas;

 

por el sucinto temblor en su piel

sabe que escuchan

 

las noticias que atañen

nuestro destino y el suyo.

 

 

Space Time Curve Espacio Tiempo Curva
He was my knife then.

There were flashes

Of steel in the sun.

He cut an orange into quarters

and handed me one,

the blade sweet with juice.

 

That’s how it was in the sun,

Strawberries for lunch and a swim

Into life itself. Life tastes

Of salt and strawberries

And the flat lick of steel

Then the sting of a thorn in your heel

 

When time swerves and curls

Backwards and we’re poised

at the top of a wave all unfurled

The girl, the fruit and the man

With the knife in his hand.

 

Entonces era mi cuchillo.

Destellos de acero

en el sol.

Cortó una naranja en cuatro trozos

y me ofreció uno,

la hoja empapada en dulce zumo.

 

Así era en el sol,

fresas para comer y un baño

en la vida misma. La vida sabe

a sal y fresas

a lamer la hoja de acero,

después, una espina en el pie.

 

Cuando el tiempo vira y se encrespa

hacia atrás y estamos suspendidos

en lo alto de una ola desplegada

la joven, la fruta y el hombre

con el cuchillo en la mano.

 

 

Goldfinches Jilgueros
Who can believe that God plays dice

and make a way through life?

 

A foot from the window a cloud

Of goldfinches descend on the niger seed.

 

Nothing I have done merits this charm

their cat faces yellow and red, as if

 

exotic flowers had taken to the air

transformed and came here

 

to Seanbhaile, Maigh Cuilinn, the world

our egocentric sun revolves around

 

as Shakespeare saw the sun spin

around the earth because we all cling

 

when all the Gods are banished down

to Saturn or Pandemonium

 

to a steady planet with a friendly sun

circling around us, even Einstein.

 

¿Quién cree que Dios juega a los dados

y sigue su camino?

 

A un palmo de la ventana, un tropel

de jilgueros desciende sobre las semillas de Níger.

 

Nada de lo que he hecho merece semejante encanto,

caras de gato amarillas y rojas, como si

 

unas flores exóticas hubieran levantado el vuelo

transformadas y llegado

 

a Seanbhaile, Maigh Cuilinn, al mundo

en torno al que orbita nuestro egocéntrico sol

 

tal como lo vio girar Shakespeare

rodeando la Tierra, porque

 

cuando los dioses se destierran

a Saturno o el Pandemonio

 

todos nos aferramos

a un planeta inmóvil con un sol complaciente

que da vueltas a nuestro alrededor, incluso Einstein.

 

 

Descent Descenso
I have looked for you among the Greeks

Where hate and love are close as blood

And blood is worth so much and no more

 

I went down among the Greeks reluctantly

not trusting in cheap plunder but there is

no more time. Threads have been pulled

 

time woven, knotted, snipped. I went

to the cities and the far islands

and met statues, women with blind eyes

 

and no mercy. In temples and bars and houses

everywhere I saw your likeness, and everywhere

women with their bored gaze

 

fixed beyond me, on some blue island

with dolphins, an olive tree, the dangerous bull

in his maze, and the woman who holds the thread.

 

None of them spoke to me, just one more

Crazed mother searching for her daughter

They are used to that here.

 

Te he buscado entre los griegos

en los que el odio y el amor son cercanos como la sangre,

y la sangre se valora, y nada más

 

Descendí entre los griegos a regañadientes

sin confiar en el expolio fariseo, pero ya

no hay tiempo. Se ha tirado de los hilos

 

el tiempo se ha tejido, anudado, cortado. Fui

a las ciudades y las islas lejanas

y encontré estatuas, mujeres con ojos ciegos

 

y despiadadas. En templos, en bares y casas,

en todas partes vi tu semejanza, y en todas partes

mujeres con mirada cansada

 

fija en la lejanía, en una isla azul

con delfines y un olivo, el peligroso toro

en su laberinto, y la mujer que sujeta el hilo.

 

Ninguna me habló, solo era otra

madre desesperada buscando a su hija

Allí están acostumbradas.

 

 

Vigil Vigilia
I have paid the coin time has extracted

With another in my mouth for the shroud

A willing deposit for when you are found.

 

I will stand in the helical stream with the winds

Scorching my ankles until someone looks up

And says ‘Bargain’ and then I will go down

 

To meet her and bring the small red

Seeds of the sun to remind her of home.

I will stand there until the dark breaks open.

He pagado la moneda que el tiempo me ha extraído

en mi boca hay otra para el sudario

un pago voluntario para cuando te encuentren.

 

Permaneceré en la corriente helicoidal y los vientos

me abrasarán los tobillos, hasta que alguien mire

y diga «trato hecho», entonces me hundiré

 

para reunirme con ella y llevarle las

semillas rojas del sol que le recuerden su hogar.

Permaneceré allí hasta que quiebre la oscuridad